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Post by darthphere on Jul 21, 2011 13:53:13 GMT -5
New issue is up. It's extremely short but it's really a bridge to the next issue which is just going to be an all action issue mostly. Truthfully, I'm not 100% happy with it but since I missed my deadline I felt I needed to get something out there. So those are my excuses lol.
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Post by The Wonderful Wachter on Jul 21, 2011 14:47:01 GMT -5
I get that. I'm not too happy with mine though it's more about being too long and a few parts being unbelievable.
As for yours. Sure, it's short, but it is a great setup issue and exactly how I'd expect your Roy and Ollie to react.
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Post by darthphere on Jul 21, 2011 14:59:11 GMT -5
Thanks for the kind words.
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Post by buck on Jul 22, 2011 2:05:28 GMT -5
I enjoyed it. Though I really think you missed what could've been a golden scene by not having Roy and Ollie at a diner getting pancakes. Just seems like it could've been a great scene.
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Post by jackalope on Jul 24, 2011 0:26:44 GMT -5
Awesome. Short but really good. Well written interaction, and I'm looking forward to see Ollie and Prometheus duel it out.
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Post by Stardrifter on Jul 31, 2011 8:28:12 GMT -5
Your dialogue is good and the bit of action at the end was done well. My main gripe, besides it being short and bare bones, is that I refuse to believe the scene between Ollie and Dinah.
So Ollie, a man who by all accounts has had some sort of mental breakdown and lives on the street as a vigilante, calls up Dinah to tell her he's got some 16 year old kid with him who wants to be like him, and she's all, "Sidekicks? Gotta love 'em!"
Dinah would have called someone to pick Roy up and get him to safety. Any sane person would. I know this is a comic universe and yeah, sidekicks, but you've been establishing that Ollie isn't quite all there and Dinah knows this. It just really took me out of the scene.
Looking forward to a more meaty issue. Keep 'em coming.
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Post by The Wonderful Wachter on Jul 31, 2011 11:09:04 GMT -5
Well, Dinah was a past hero too... So maybe that's why. Alternately. She could be banking on Roy to help Ollie's personality like Robin does for Bats.
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Post by darthphere on Jul 31, 2011 11:47:37 GMT -5
I have to admit, never thought about it that way and it's an excellent point. Something I will keep in mind for the future. A good life lesson too, never leave kids with possibly crazy people.
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Post by The Wonderful Wachter on Jul 31, 2011 15:51:39 GMT -5
Depends on the type of crazy.
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Post by kardonwire on Aug 31, 2011 18:45:50 GMT -5
Just finished reading the first three issues and I enjoyed each one. While it may be going a bit too fast, it's better that than going too slow. Also the way you write is really good for capturing how sleazy and crime filled Star city is, found myself able to picture the city easily.
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Post by darthphere on Sept 30, 2011 19:29:42 GMT -5
#4 is finally up! Never thought this day would come!
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Post by C_Miller on Sept 30, 2011 20:09:15 GMT -5
As upset as I was that you dropped Y, it shows that you're committed to Green Arrow, which excites me to no end.
I liked the issue. I would like another quiet issue some time in the near future. That's something I feel like UGA has been lacking a bit. From the little we have seen, I can tell that your real skills are in character interaction. The stuff between Roy and Ollie and Dinah and Ollie are truly fantastic. They don't talk in sound bytes, they talk like real people, which is something a lot of fanfic-ers have trouble with.
Again, can't find much fault with the issue other than a preference thing. I also noticed that you used present tense. I know that's the tense that most people use on this site, but I've never been as aware of it. I have no idea what that means...
Good issue, I hope that you can post more now that you dropped Y.
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Post by darthphere on Sept 30, 2011 20:13:10 GMT -5
I had a feeling you would be more upset than me for dropping Y lol. And yes, we'll be seeing some quieter issues ahead.
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Post by jackalope on Oct 1, 2011 0:02:34 GMT -5
I liked it. Looking forward to seeing the life Oliver leads expand, so we get to see more of how he's living and surviving. I too am sad about Y the Last man, but there's always the future...
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Post by Stardrifter on Oct 4, 2011 19:50:47 GMT -5
This is definitely your best issue yet. The action was tight and the pace was right. Some minor mistakes here and there but nothing too aggregious. Keep em coming.
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Post by superecwfan1 on Oct 19, 2011 10:50:40 GMT -5
I really loved the battle between Ollie and Promethus . I did like that Roy basically with his entrance there helped save Ollie. I can't wait til his return. Also liked the sub plot with Dinah looking for Conner .
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