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Post by unchartedfan1 on Jan 14, 2013 18:57:46 GMT -5
Is anyone up to proofread Superman #6? I'm very close to being done with it, I just have to add a few more touches before I've finished.
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Post by unchartedfan1 on Jan 15, 2013 19:14:42 GMT -5
#6 is out and I exist now! I hope you guys enjoy.
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Post by liquidsword34 on Jan 15, 2013 19:44:06 GMT -5
Ah good, thought those pesky scissor men has got you
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Post by unchartedfan1 on Jan 15, 2013 19:49:30 GMT -5
Haha nope, I narrowly escaped
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Post by liquidsword34 on Jan 15, 2013 20:59:37 GMT -5
The proof reading errors are kind of jarring with this one ie "Lana fiery red hair rained down" is the opening line. I'm not sure how much proof reading you do, but this is a consistent problem. I'm also not big on Lana's reaction to that guy and Clark's reaction to it. From what we saw, he asked to have sex with her once. No force, harassment etc, just a request. She responded by assaulting him. It doesn't seem like a reasonable response. If she said no and he grabbed her or something then sure, her slapping him is fair, but that didn't happen, and it came off as consensual casual sex=evil and cause for assault. Clark's response of being happy about that is also a bit weird, because he's Superman. He shouldn't be happy about that.
On the plus, the Zod stuff remains strong, although I think it's taken a long time for it all to come together.
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Post by unchartedfan1 on Jan 15, 2013 21:34:15 GMT -5
I'm not the greatest at proofreading, but I do go over it a few times before I post it, fixing what I can. And the Zod stuff will all come down soon.
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Post by Drake on Jan 15, 2013 23:00:05 GMT -5
Well...I don't know what to say. You asked me to proofread it and I did. I gave you things to fix, and you didn't. That's cool and all, but at the very least you should have reread it again for grammar/spelling errors. And the Lana/guy/sex part is, as liquidsword stated, awkward. I'm glad you didn't put down my name for "edited by Drake" because I really did nothing. Please don't ask me to proofread if you're not going to take ANY of my advice. And, by the way, I'm not angry, but don't ask someone to do something for you if you aren't going to let them help. This has been a problem of yours twice now, with Silentking and me as your editors. I'm still up to helping you and proofreading, but don't ask if you don't want help. But know this, chances are if someone tells you that you should do something, you really should do it. You need more than your own opinion.
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Post by unchartedfan1 on Jan 15, 2013 23:25:44 GMT -5
Well...I don't know what to say. You asked me to proofread it and I did. I gave you things to fix, and you didn't. That's cool and all, but at the very least you should have reread it again for grammar/spelling errors. And the Lana/guy/sex part is, as liquidsword stated, awkward. I'm glad you didn't put down my name for "edited by Drake" because I really did nothing. Please don't ask me to proofread if you're not going to take ANY of my advice. And, by the way, I'm not angry, but don't ask someone to do something for you if you aren't going to let them help. This has been a problem of yours twice now, with Silentking and me as your editors. I'm still up to helping you and proofreading, but don't ask if you don't want help. But know this, chances are if someone tells you that you should do something, you really should do it. You need more than your own opinion. The thing is...I did reread it. I picked out a few more things. When I handed it off to you and Silentking respectively, you guys didn't actually proofread for grammar etc. I didn't see any reason to change the Lana part, for my own reasons, that scene is a part of my vision for Lana. It isn't that I didn't want your help, but the only thing I recall you telling me is that scene. I didn't want to/see the need to change it because I don't want to compromise my vision for the characters at the cost of a scene. I did read it over, I just didn't catch everything. It isn't really that I don't want your guys' help, it's that the only things you two gave me were to change things that would compromise my vision for said characters. I'm sorry if I offended you in any way.
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Post by Ultimate Silentking on Jan 16, 2013 10:53:04 GMT -5
You guys must have awesome attention to detail because I hardly noticed any proof reading mistakes. In fact, I still don't understand how the example liquid gave is, well, an example. Then again, I will admit I lost track of who was who in the Superman, Steel, and Metallo free for all. Also, I didn't find anything wrong with Lana's reaction to the guy who asked to have sex with her until liquid pointed out. Anyway, I pretty much liked the story in general with the Zod scene still my favorite part. 8/10
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Post by liquidsword34 on Jan 16, 2013 11:57:15 GMT -5
"Lana fiery red hair rained down" should've been "Lana's fiery red hair rained down". Unless her name is Lana Fiery Red Hair and she's what's raining down.
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Post by Stardrifter on Jan 16, 2013 12:36:14 GMT -5
Yeah there were a LOT of errors. Mostly simple things that were easy to catch.
Besides that, I understand having your vision for your characters. At this point, Lana had been pretty consistent. We just have to accept that shes not the character we want. There's nothing wrong with that. However, I think it wouldn't be so objectionable if all of your female characters weren't written that way.
I just dont get where this series is going. Steel, Metallo, Bizarros, those other aliens at the beginning, everything just seems kind if aimless. Zod is the only plot that seems to have purpose, but it's dragging like crazy.
Keep em coming.
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Post by Ultimate Silentking on Jan 16, 2013 14:31:14 GMT -5
"Lana fiery red hair rained down" should've been "Lana's fiery red hair rained down". Unless her name is Lana Fiery Red Hair and she's what's raining down. Yeah, I don't know how I missed that.
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Post by unchartedfan1 on Jan 16, 2013 16:09:13 GMT -5
I just dont get where this series is going. Steel, Metallo, Bizarros, those other aliens at the beginning, everything just seems kind if aimless. Zod is the only plot that seems to have purpose, but it's dragging like crazy. Only time shall tell that tale. Every single Zod scene is full of importance.
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Post by Drake on Jan 16, 2013 19:20:21 GMT -5
I wasn't mad or offended, Mez (can I call you Mez?), just a little disappointed. It's okay. I still enjoyed the issue and the reveal of Lana as Steel...probably.
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Feb 1, 2013 12:50:47 GMT -5
I actually like this chapter a lot.
I know I keep saying "You're improving" and sounding like a broken record, but I mean it. The grammar's getting better, and characterization's getting better.
I like the reveal of Lana as Steel. Your characterization of women is improving. Lana Lang actually seemed like a real human this time.
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Post by jackalope on Feb 8, 2013 15:15:05 GMT -5
Hey man, sorry it's taken so long to catch up- especially seeing as how our titles are so intertwined. The last two issues have been great, really fun stuff. I could understand Star's annoyance but for me I thought they were cool, lots of high paced action & quirky characters. I really liked the reveal, I can see (in part at least) why you portrayed Lana the way you did. I think it's cool that between us we show two very different sides of the same city.
And Star- its alot my fault for the delay in Zod's storyline as we're planning a crossover, I'm lagging a bit on my end.
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Post by unchartedfan1 on Feb 16, 2013 12:13:08 GMT -5
#0 is up. My brother helped me write this one and I hope you all enjoy it.
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Post by Drake on Feb 16, 2013 18:00:49 GMT -5
It was good. One of my favorite issues so far. Possibly even my favorite. I was just a little confused...when did Clark change into his "Super-suit"? Was he in it the entire time? It never really said. I enjoyed it. 7.5/10.
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Post by unchartedfan1 on Feb 16, 2013 18:08:36 GMT -5
It was good. One of my favorite issues so far. Possibly even my favorite. I was just a little confused...when did Clark change into his "Super-suit"? Was he in it the entire time? It never really said. I enjoyed it. 7.5/10. I didn't say in there. I just left you guys the job of figuring out that it was between him exiting into the shadows and then Superman appearing.
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Post by liquidsword34 on Feb 16, 2013 19:18:05 GMT -5
It was good. One of my favorite issues so far. Possibly even my favorite. I was just a little confused...when did Clark change into his "Super-suit"? Was he in it the entire time? It never really said. I enjoyed it. 7.5/10. I didn't say in there. I just left you guys the job of figuring out that it was between him exiting into the shadows and then Superman appearing. I think he meant during the earlier scene, when he was saving people from the falling debris. He didn't switch costume, he was just flying around it his street clothes shooting laser beams and such. There were still quite a few errors, but it's definitely improving.
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