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Post by The Wonderful Wachter on Feb 15, 2014 1:04:04 GMT -5
Yeah. That was a problem a lot of people had and it was because of miscommunication between Adrini and me... I think. That'll be clear come issue 5 this month. He (whichever Jason he is) will come to have a big role in future BoP issues.
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Post by superecwfan1 on Feb 16, 2014 16:39:53 GMT -5
I read #2 of Birds of Prey which seems to flash a few years ahead. I do love the relationships building in #2. Your doing a lot to establish the relationships with the characters of Jade , Dinah and Kate. Its very good.
My only nitpicks is the scene breaks . Like where you started you could have said "3 Years Later" or "Months Later : Star City" etc etc. I also wished we had more detail with Oliver Queen. I know he seemingly shows up in this as a playboy . But we don't really get much into him. .
I am intrigued to see where #3 goes when I go to read it next. That final part #2 left me interested.
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Post by superecwfan1 on Feb 20, 2014 0:29:39 GMT -5
I recently read #3 of Birds of Prey and its a pretty nice introduction of Renee Montoya in this. I thought it was nice. I also liked the Rogues starting to form slowly with a plan.
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Post by Drake on May 11, 2014 20:04:15 GMT -5
So, you probably haven't seen it, but I did a review for WW where I posted my thoughts as I read it. It worked well, so I'm sticking with that for BoP 5.
-Your chemistry between the girls is as good as usual. -Dinah I being motherly is funny and heartwarming as hell! -Prof Pyg! -Down side, very short
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Post by adrini on May 11, 2014 20:16:20 GMT -5
It was too short. I lost my co-writer at the last minute and had to scramble to get something out as the title was on the chopping block. Glad the rest of it was good though.
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Post by adrini on May 24, 2014 13:25:06 GMT -5
Birds is done. Just needs to be proofed.
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Post by adrini on May 27, 2014 17:23:15 GMT -5
Birds 6 up.
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Post by adrini on Sept 8, 2014 15:57:35 GMT -5
Next chapter up.
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Post by cross on Sept 8, 2014 18:32:35 GMT -5
I am caught up with all issues of BoP. Honestly I find that this series doesn't have the action that it needs to be a comic book story based on a team of heroes. That being said, I am utterly in love with this book. Your writing of these characters is descriptive, beautiful, and captivating. I genuinely feel happy/sad/worried/proud of these characters. It's a book where nothing really happens and yet I really can't say a bad thing about it. Everytime I finish a chapter I want more right then and there. As I've said a bunch on here, timeline confusion. I love this book
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Post by adrini on Sept 8, 2014 18:39:24 GMT -5
The early part of is set up, and was tied to prior haven stuff early on. I'll try to keep the people good and get some action in as well. Glad you like it!
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Post by Drake on Sept 8, 2014 21:03:33 GMT -5
Nice issue. I really liked some of the ideas hinted at with BC as the avatar of sorts for Dr. Fate. BC I's death was horribly sad, but I have to admit I'm slightly guiltily pleased because now no one will be mixing the two Di's up. I'm not gonna complain about no action. There's always room for that in the future.
Quick question before I score you. Can you use Klarion without claiming him? And I'm assuming you're keeping in mind Star's use of him in Demon Knights.
8/10
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Post by adrini on Sept 8, 2014 21:14:51 GMT -5
I got full permission and cleared the scene with him prior to publication.
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Post by adrini on Oct 27, 2014 18:36:30 GMT -5
Next chapter up.
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Post by cross on Oct 28, 2014 7:06:36 GMT -5
While reading this issue I kept thinking that we have got to be coming up on a time jump right? The timeline in Birds of Prey isnt very far off from the Timeline of Green Arrow. The time jump would kick this story and catch it up with Green Arrow having the BoP reform and adventure it up. Actually, I take that back. There are a ton of stories to tell if the BoP title focuses on Kate and Jade. Di's character is getting close to catching up though. I'm probably wrong here but that was the feeling i kept getting while reading this.
I've said many times before that I really enjoy Adrini's titles. She can nail the character drama and is getting there with the action part. I felt this issue was not on par with her usual work. I was so confused by everything here that I could barely finish the story. The dialog parts just kicked me in the head. Half the time I didn't know who was talking and the other half I didn't know what they were talking about. I don't know if it's the story or if I'm the problem but something wasn't clicking here. I've found that I'm more interested in Jade and Kate than Di in this series. I get enough of the sad and happy family in Green Arrow so I enjoy reading the characters of Jade and Kate more here. I'm very interested in their backstories.
Am I the only one who doesn't know what the hell is going on with the Court of Owls or has anything at all been explained with them? I want to see them and their story but I don't get to in any story that they appear in. I want to know their plan!
Overall I just felt out of this issue. I don't know if it was me or what but I couldn't get into it. The ending was great and sets up interest for next issue. Also CATMAN showed up and wasn't an ass!
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Post by adrini on Oct 28, 2014 9:08:56 GMT -5
This chapter was the hard one, and I'm sorry it didn't hit the mark as well. With the passing of bc1 the girls have lost their protector so the action levels are going to become far more important. This was the bridge and those are always hard.
I'm glad you want more information about the other girls, and the owls. They will be the new focus so that's actually perfect. Di is going away for a time, so no worries there. With the bridge done I hoe you like the next chapter better.
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Post by Drake on Oct 28, 2014 9:29:47 GMT -5
Nice issue. A bit jumpy, but good. It wasn't fantastic but it certainly wasn't bad.
I'm liking the development and I hope we do get to that time jump soon.
7.5/10
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Post by adrini on Dec 12, 2014 17:19:00 GMT -5
chapter 9 up
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Post by Drake on Dec 12, 2014 18:57:55 GMT -5
Ok...I'm not going to score this issue for now, because I want you to respond to this.
Why did Adrian take Dinah? Why wouldn't she go back with the Birds? Also, where did the Shado plot come from?
This was a decent issue. You had a weird paragraph at the start of your last scene, making it seem like you filled in the story under an outline but forgot to take out a part of the outline when you were beta'ing it. I'm liking Kate's badass attitude. It fits with how she matures and develops in 'Haven. The plot's moving quickly, but maybe a bit too quickly. I can follow everything, but it seems jumbled, and there's no time for action which this title sorely needs. Espionage won't cut it in a Birds of Prey title.
Frankly, I'm going to stop the questioning and critiques there, because I think what it comes down to is you're overwhelmed with writing. If I were you, I'd try to get a co-writer. Maybe Cross? Maybe someone from All Star Marvel? I don't know. You need a little help to get your titles up on time and in the best shape they can be.
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Post by adrini on Dec 12, 2014 19:21:30 GMT -5
1. Explained next chapter, Shiva doesn't explain everything she does off the bat.
2. She would have if the birds had gotten there first. Shiva beat them to it, and she has her own ideas on the matter which will come clear.
3. Introduced. First appearance.
I looked for the paragraph and couldn't find what you were talking about, so did DOB.
I am somewhat confused that the plot is moving with espionage and there not being action. Granted there wasn't fighting but I made it rather clear there is a very kick ass fight right around the corner.
As for the last matter if you have concerns I would prefer they discussed over PM.
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Post by Drake on Dec 12, 2014 20:06:31 GMT -5
"Shiva tracks down Adrien and says they have to move now, Di is in bad shape and needs to get out. They infiltrate the area and get the girl outside. Scene ends with spiriting the badly beaten young woman to a private hospital room till she can be shipped out. Much longer and she wouldn't have made it." Read more: ultimatedc.proboards.com/thread/1952/birds-prey-chapter-9-searching#ixzz3Ljf5i5zuThat's the paragraph. It threw me out of the story. It just feels like you've been limited the action the past few issues. Granted, you don't need it all the time, but it sure doesn't hurt. Plus, I wasn't entirely sure when the last scene took place. I assumed Shiva had gotten there first, but I wasn't positive so I didn't know if Shiva was working with the Birds and thus thought you skipped the fight scene. I was wrong. That's my fault.
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