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Post by Stardrifter on Nov 6, 2012 16:03:23 GMT -5
I agree this was more a past issue than present. It was mostly setup for next issue, which will only have one flashback and some big events in the present.
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Post by buck on Nov 7, 2012 12:03:51 GMT -5
I'm waiting for two things Etrigan and Morgaine's turn.
Was also nice to see a little cameo in there.
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Post by Stardrifter on Nov 11, 2012 14:37:24 GMT -5
#3 is up!
So ends the first arc. There's a lot of questions still left unanswered, and you'll get some of those answers in the next arc. I'm interested to see if anyone will pick up on a somewhat obvious fact I left spoken yet not clear.
So let me know what you guys think!
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Nov 12, 2012 11:11:43 GMT -5
I like it. A climactic end in which we finally get to meet Etrigan. A good setup for the rest of the story, though as you said quite a few questions remain unanswered.
How exactly Morgaine learned the demonic portion of magic, or how she thought summoning a demon would benefit her, the identity of the voice at the end of the chapter, etcetera.
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Post by liquidsword34 on Nov 12, 2012 16:49:28 GMT -5
Good climax to the arc and leaves a lot of room for you to expand on what happened. Good issue.
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Post by Stardrifter on Nov 12, 2012 22:03:32 GMT -5
Updated the Secret Files with a new section and some short bios. They'll continue to get updated as time goes by, though I'm trying to avoid spoiling too much in them.
The man at the end was never meant to be a mystery. Though he isn't named, I made it pretty obvious. Plus he is now named in the updated Secret Files.
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Post by C_Miller on Nov 12, 2012 23:40:35 GMT -5
I don't think I've actually reviewed a single issue of yours, even though I've read them all. Right now, I'll just review the final issue. That said, I liked all of them.
I really enjoyed this, but I think this may have been my least favorite of the series so far. It felt extremely short compared to the other issues, therefore kind of feeling tacked on. It was almost as if you didn't have enough story for three issues, but had too much story for two. There's nothing wrong with that, but I wish you had put in a little bit more. Maybe another flashback scene or something.
I also don't think you gave enough time to the past storyline. It's hard to feel the tragedy of Morgaine's betrayal without giving them more focus through the arc. They were just married last issue and there were hints of it and in the first appearance in this issue, she's evil.
But I did like it. Always well written and I'm definitely looking forward to seeing where Jason Blood goes from here.
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Post by Stardrifter on Nov 13, 2012 10:33:13 GMT -5
The briefness of the flashbacks was on purpose. The, readernow knows the broad strokes about what happened, but much of the context will be revealed over time as Dawn learns the truth. There will also be a mini series in the future dealing specifically with the story of Arthur.
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Post by C_Miller on Nov 13, 2012 14:18:42 GMT -5
I can respect that. I think the reason it became an issue in my mind was that I found the issue a little too short to begin with.
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Post by buck on Nov 13, 2012 14:29:21 GMT -5
The action was very well done. I do agree with Chris the past seemed rush but I believe you'll deliver later on.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 24, 2012 1:54:28 GMT -5
Still catching up...so Demon Knights #2 Initial thought-lost all respect for Jason Blood, how can anyone ruin perfectly good scotch by adding ice to it. If you are going to drink scotch properly it has to be single malt not blended and neat. You only add water if you are drinking cask strength, where it is meant to be watered down before drinking. If he's lived as long as he claims, he knows this and if he is going to drink his scotch on the rocks he might as well consign himself to hell already and be done with it Other than that, enjoyable. it's well written and there's a lot of foreshadowing in the past, but it feels like both past nor present are moving forward in baby steps sue to the split in attention. It's a juggling act trying to keep the issues short, flesh everything out with enough description and dialogue, and move the story forward with several focal points. For the most part the balance is working ok but it could have used a bit more meat in this issue. However, I know it is something I struggle with in every issue I write, so I get how challenging it can be. -M
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Post by Deleted on Nov 24, 2012 3:51:07 GMT -5
Ok now finished #3. I liked what was there quite a bit. As others have said, it felt brief, but c'est la vie. I thought the transformation between Jason and Etrigan being the scene switch between the flashback and the present was brilliantly done. Worked well in prose and would have worked very well had their been artwork to accompany this in comic format. A very good story telling technique used very well. The male visitor at the end was an easy guess, not a cipher as some seem to think, or it was in a sense, a Mr. Louis Cyphre I enjoyed the first arc. Each part felt a little brief, but as a whole it told a full story. Look forward to more. -M
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Post by Stardrifter on Nov 24, 2012 10:38:28 GMT -5
Thank you for the kind words. I was particularly proud of the transformation. I hated having to put the Present transition in, but I wanted to be consistent. I see my stories very visually, as if I was writing a tv show or movie, so I thought it was a very powerful visual.
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Post by Stardrifter on Dec 2, 2012 14:35:45 GMT -5
#4 - Chaos Theory Part 1 is up!
In this issue we see how Dawn deals with everything that's happened and get a bit more backstory for Jason. We also meet a new character with ties to Jason.
Let me know what you guys think!
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Post by liquidsword34 on Dec 2, 2012 20:38:17 GMT -5
Unless I've missed it, is it explained why Dawn still has magic powers? Wouldn't they leave when Jason got rid of the demon? Aside from that fantastic issue, I quite like the way Jason deals with Dawn at the start especially, as though he's dealt with people coming to terms with being possessed before.
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Post by Stardrifter on Dec 2, 2012 20:46:35 GMT -5
The demon didn't have any magical powers. It was always Dawn. I made mention a couple times about how the demon shouldn't have been able to cast spells. It was just a low level demon who can only possess people until they burn out. But it discovered Dawn's power, which it could have used to hold onto her permanently.
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Post by Stardrifter on Dec 2, 2012 23:24:23 GMT -5
Modified the secret files with the new character. Suggest you read the new issue first before viewing it.
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Post by buck on Dec 3, 2012 13:09:15 GMT -5
Excellent.
The interaction between Dawn and Jason are very good you have their voices down pat.
Also you claimed Zauriel damn you. Was going to be my first claim when I got Hawkman up.
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Post by C_Miller on Dec 4, 2012 2:31:41 GMT -5
I always said that the true test of a writer is the second story. The first story is always easiest because you have free reign of what to do because your world is new. But the follow up is far more limiting.
You don't run into any problems here. It was very good and your title, despite only being four issues in feels very defined. The biggest takeaway is how your characters already have distinct voices, especially Blood.
Very good, keep it up.
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Post by Stardrifter on Dec 4, 2012 10:31:16 GMT -5
Thanks for the kind reviews. Still waiting to see if anyone picks up on the biggest structural influence to this series. I'll give you guys a hint in that it was a tv series, among other things.
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