leviathan
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Writer of Ultimate Expendables
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Post by leviathan on Sept 29, 2011 22:14:21 GMT -5
First issue's up!  |
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Post by jackalope on Sept 30, 2011 2:49:21 GMT -5
Yay, Jenny Sparks! Look forward to seeing this Title.
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Post by C_Miller on Sept 30, 2011 9:40:36 GMT -5
Oh God, we've got another fast writer. Jack, someone's giving you a run for your money.
Anyways, it was a little short, but it was an issue 0. Definitely sets the title up, which is good. One thing that I would say is that we're all adults here, you don't need to censor the cursing. That was actually a little distracting.
Keep it up.
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Post by buck on Sept 30, 2011 17:11:08 GMT -5
I'm interested to see where you take this book. I enjoyed the issue even though the ending seem off. It just seemed a tad bit forced, but I'll definitely be reading.
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Post by Stardrifter on Oct 2, 2011 17:00:11 GMT -5
Yeah I didn't buy Apollo just giving up his identity like that. Other than that it was good. Just make em longer and keep em coming.
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leviathan
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Post by leviathan on Oct 2, 2011 18:07:52 GMT -5
Annnnnnnnnnnnnnd next issue's up.
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Post by C_Miller on Oct 2, 2011 19:20:43 GMT -5
Again, it's very short. It might be worth taking some time and adding length. Now I'm not saying that will equal quality, but taking more time is never a bad idea.
It looks like you have some good ideas and have a decent handle on the material, but you're not allowing it to develop.
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Post by jackalope on Oct 3, 2011 1:30:25 GMT -5
I think the shortness might be fine as long as you keep updating at a reasonable pace, though you could hold off and put out bigger chunks. Is you Jenny Sparks the spirit of this century? Look forward to more.
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Post by Stardrifter on Oct 8, 2011 18:30:33 GMT -5
I agree. Was good but short. Not much to say beyond that. Keep 'em coming.
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leviathan
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Post by leviathan on Oct 16, 2011 20:03:33 GMT -5
Posted.
Tried making it longer.
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leviathan
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Post by leviathan on Oct 21, 2011 15:25:20 GMT -5
Will have another one soon
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Post by The Wonderful Wachter on Oct 23, 2011 19:09:35 GMT -5
Short. Sweet. I liked them for the most part. Loved the ending of Babylons Finest.
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Post by Stardrifter on Nov 3, 2011 18:37:15 GMT -5
Was interesting. I do feel like the shortness kind of takes away from it. Like it doesn't give it time to get a feel for it as a reader. Might start waiting till you have 2 or 3 issues posted and read them all at once from now on.
Keep 'em coming.
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