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Post by Ryan on May 22, 2011 14:48:04 GMT -5
First issue is up.
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Post by C_Miller on May 22, 2011 16:21:24 GMT -5
Nice. I'm not going to lie, I'm extremely excited about this series. Zatanna has been a favorite of mine for a while and I'm really looking forward to how you write her. Plus the UDCU needs some more female heroes (like any at all).
There were a couple times where you forgot to close or start quotes when there was dialog going on. Other than that a fine start. I'm looking forward to it.
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Post by Ryan on May 22, 2011 17:05:49 GMT -5
Thanks...I'll go fix it. I was typin it on my iPad last night and it was just a pain to get to the quote button. Though I had caught most of them when I proof read it.
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Post by Toriach on May 22, 2011 17:24:47 GMT -5
Interesting. I really liked the bit with the vending machine, I was able to "see" the scene very clearly. Nice work.
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Post by C_Miller on May 22, 2011 17:31:13 GMT -5
Oh, also I do hope you keep her in college. I actually can't think of many superheroes outside of Spider-Man who did college and superheroics at the same time and his college life wasn't exactly the best established thing ever.
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Post by Ryan on May 22, 2011 18:18:52 GMT -5
That's my plan; is to keep her in college. Gives me more people for her to interact with in a natural setting and can flesh out more of her personality in the small random moments.
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Post by darthphere on May 24, 2011 23:42:38 GMT -5
Not going to lie, absolutely loved it. I can already tell this title is going to be great.
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Post by superecwfan1 on May 25, 2011 10:51:25 GMT -5
I really liked Zatanna . I enjoyed that 1st issue and where Phantom Stranger shows up. I admit I like the Stranger a lot . He always showing up and being the mysterious guy. So props for using him.
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Post by Ryan on May 31, 2011 14:54:20 GMT -5
Issue #2 is up.
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Post by jackalope on Jun 1, 2011 8:30:53 GMT -5
Liking Zatanna and liking how the plot is growing. I actually really like the idea of the demon siphoning magic deal, pretty cool. Like with everyone else here, I'm looking forward to seeing how you balance the quieter relationship based aspects of the story with the action. Bring on #3.
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Post by superecwfan1 on Jun 14, 2011 15:35:39 GMT -5
Just saw that #2 was up... kinda dumb to not see it sooner. But I liked the story and Zatanna learning and the Phantom Stranger helping her. It was pretty fun to see her finally make the water into wine. Nice build to #3.
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Post by The Wonderful Wachter on Jun 19, 2011 0:24:00 GMT -5
Hmm.
The Good: I like the story (I can see it building up), the setting, Zatanna or "Zee" is interesting as is the Phantom Stranger showing up. Loved the Candy bar and the Pizza and the TV going BOOM.
The Bad: Feels kinda rushed and you didn't really describe the Professor or Julie. They're just there. Next to the vivid Zee and Phantom Stranger, they are even more mundane than they should be.
The Ugly: Choppy, choppy, choppy.
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Post by Ryan on Jun 19, 2011 7:17:41 GMT -5
Thanks I'm having fun with story ideas because she's not your typical hero. I'll definitely get more detailed with my character descriptions especially Julie she'll be a supporting character. Just curious to see what you meant by choppy...i havent wrote anything since the last site so I'd like to improve on that and avoid it with Detective.
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Post by buck on Jun 20, 2011 21:25:09 GMT -5
Really enjoyed the start to this you've created some very vivid scenes in the first few issues.
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Post by Stardrifter on Jun 20, 2011 21:37:52 GMT -5
I concur with the rushed feeling. PS just rambled all the info off and, despite you saying Zatanna was feeling overwhelmed, she just kinda accepts it and starts training. It really made me feel disconnected from the story.
But your ideas are fun. I do like it so far. Keep 'em coming.
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Post by Ryan on Jul 3, 2011 23:18:10 GMT -5
Issue #3 is up.
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Post by jackalope on Jul 4, 2011 0:03:51 GMT -5
Liked it, the underworld seemed cool. Did you get the clown head idea from somewhere. It's a good set up, I like the she is forced straight into the action. The only thing I found was I want to see more of everything, (like the underworld, her house) the story to me feels a little rushed, in that she adapting amazingly quickly, but in saying that I think you're doing a great job setting her up, and you'll have plenty of time to expand on everything later on. Looking forward to more.
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Post by Ryan on Jul 4, 2011 0:19:00 GMT -5
Thanks...I was watching the Simpsons when I saw Krusty, and figured that'd be a nifty idea to have a fun house be the entrance.
I agree, that's always been my weakest point, is describing the surroundings. I guess I probably could of spent more time getting her more familiar with everything, which probably would have made this part a little bit more believable. Guess it's a little to late at this point, but I'll try and correct it for the next issue.
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Post by The Wonderful Wachter on Jul 4, 2011 0:23:40 GMT -5
Short. Sweet. To the point.
Stranger needs to be named Bob.
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Post by Ryan on Jul 4, 2011 1:07:19 GMT -5
Thanks...My issues always seem longer in Microsoft Word. I kept getting tired of saying Stranger, that's what made me come up with that line about giving him a name.
Added Julie to the Secret Files.
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