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Post by spiderfan on May 24, 2011 23:15:30 GMT -5
Made first post of the story...More to come probably this week! What did you guys think? First time I am trying a Fan Fic series, so I am excited to see what people say!
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Post by darthphere on May 25, 2011 0:03:50 GMT -5
Just finished reading this, good stuff. Enjoyed the father/son type conflict.
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Post by C_Miller on May 25, 2011 12:18:04 GMT -5
Very nice. I love a good father/son story and it looks like this is going to be a good one. I look forward to see where this goes. Remind me to thank Jewish Hobbit for giving me your name.
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Post by jross on May 26, 2011 9:56:34 GMT -5
Looks very promising. One minor thing, but you may need to know it if you use more Egyptian mythology, but it wasn't Ra who was dismembered by Set/Seth/Sutekh, but Osiris.
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Post by Ryan on May 26, 2011 13:59:22 GMT -5
I liked the Egyptian mythology bit, I've always found that stuff interesting. But it was good, curious to see where it goes.
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Post by spiderfan on Jun 1, 2011 22:05:57 GMT -5
Sorry about the delay in posting the last half of this issue, but I have been hammered by serious life stuff last week. I have the outline for it all done, just not got a chance to jot it down.
I'm shooting to do it tomorrow night or Friday night.
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Post by Stardrifter on Jun 19, 2011 9:20:24 GMT -5
Was good. Needed some proofreading, but otherwise a good start. You wrote the father/son angle very well. Looking forward to more.
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Post by entertainer13 on Jun 19, 2011 21:30:53 GMT -5
Excellent set up, good execution. Some spelling and grammar errors here and there, but nothing that stood out. Your opening scene was great. I want to know more about their past, the specifics on the apparent adoption, what led to all the grief that Hector had, causing him to split. Something that powerful doesn't happen over night.
You've made me give a crap, so, let's see where this goes.
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Post by buck on Jun 20, 2011 0:59:40 GMT -5
Really liked how you handled the story thus far can't wait to see where it goes from here. I have to say as I read more writers stuff on here I can't help, but be nervous how my own work will stack up.
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Post by spiderfan on Jun 26, 2011 1:27:58 GMT -5
New post. Sorry this took so long. I had a REALLY rough stretch, lol.
I noticed some misspellings and stuff too when I was going back to the last post...prob have a few in this post too. I'm gonna go back and edit all that stuff later tomorrow. But, I wanted to be sure I got the new post out there, lol.
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Post by spiderfan on Jun 26, 2011 1:29:00 GMT -5
I am loving the good buzz the first post got, so thanks to all you guys! I will read a bunch of your stuff this week and give some input, don't worry  |
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Post by buck on Jun 26, 2011 2:26:50 GMT -5
I like what you are putting out just wishing for a bit more length.
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Post by jackalope on Jun 26, 2011 5:14:18 GMT -5
Enjoying it. Dialogue is good between the father and son. Looking forward to the future of the series.
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Post by Stardrifter on Jun 26, 2011 8:33:29 GMT -5
Damn bums! Always magically invading your mind and stealing your memories! Something outta be done!
Was a good follow up, though short. Keep 'em coming.
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Post by superecwfan1 on Jun 28, 2011 18:16:37 GMT -5
I loved that 1st issue. I'm not a big FATE fan but I loved the whole father/son dynamic of Hector and Kent. How the 2 don't get along.
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