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Post by jackalope on May 31, 2011 5:36:03 GMT -5
First story is up. Please let me know what you think. Some of the spelling may be off as I'm not from America and use an uk spell checker. If there's problems with the grammar that'll be on me.
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Post by Toriach on May 31, 2011 10:58:08 GMT -5
That was WONDERFUL! I loved it. I love the idea of Diana not speaking English, I love how you show her strength and her compassion right away. I love her being totally unfazed by the mugging. And I really loved the ending. I love the idea of the idiot muggers being so totally pissed off that they don't even think that technically they are confessing to a crime because all they can think about is that their guns got stolen. I can't wait for the next issue.
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Post by Ryan on May 31, 2011 11:37:01 GMT -5
That was awesome. I really liked the whole mugging scene. You also made me consider redoing what I've already wrote for Superman b/c you gave me some ideas. I'm ready for issue #2.
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Post by C_Miller on May 31, 2011 13:41:24 GMT -5
Nice. I really liked this and I'm very happy that we have put the last member of the Big Three in such capable hands. I really look forward to the future with this title.
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Post by jackalope on Jun 1, 2011 8:14:52 GMT -5
Second part up. Thanks for the kind feedback on the first. Sorry if I'm stepping on anyone's toes if I'm using dc companies (eg Queen Industries) in ways that doesn't fit into the stories of others. I'm trying to keep such references somewhat vague, but if its messing with something in your story please let me know and I'll change it out for another name. I'm a bit of a continuity freak but I also love references within stories to other parts of the world. One of the main things I like about the idea of a dc ultimate universe is seeing it all develop together.
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Post by Toriach on Jun 1, 2011 21:52:57 GMT -5
Well personally to me part of the fun of a shared universe is taking what one writer does with something that impacts on the universe at large or my part of it and finding a way to work with it in my own stories.
And congratulations on making the Angle Man into a genuinely interesting character.
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Post by jackalope on Jun 9, 2011 3:17:07 GMT -5
Number 3 up.
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Post by thekillingjoke on Jun 9, 2011 21:59:09 GMT -5
Well done, jackalope. This is good stuff. Your material has that "comic book-y" feel to it without coming off hokey, the kind of thing you might read in a novelization like the Death and Return of Superman or No Man's Land.
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Post by C_Miller on Jun 10, 2011 13:31:55 GMT -5
For some reason I missed issue two, so I read two and three this morning. Both extremely excellent. I can still tell that she's Wonder Woman, but you are also throwing in an extremely unique take on the character. I love a good fish out of water story. Thor was excellent in that respect. But yeah, I can't wait to see how this develops.
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Post by jackalope on Jun 11, 2011 21:23:30 GMT -5
Thanks. I'm trying to run them out while I've got momentum. Really enjoying writing, as well as reading everyone else's pieces. I'm hoping that this thing can keep going to the point where an ultimate Justice League can form. That'd be great. My Wonder Woman definitely has Thor qualities, as well as a bit of Leeloo from fifth element. Once I've finished the World of Wonders storyline, I want to look at taking another character...
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Post by jackalope on Jun 14, 2011 8:16:27 GMT -5
4 up.
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Post by The Wonderful Wachter on Jun 19, 2011 15:20:49 GMT -5
I agree with everything that has been said so far and Issue 1 was a fantastic way to introduce your incarnation of Wonder Woman. (I laughed at the end with the punks complaining about the gun)
That said, since it is a series, you probably shouldn't switch tenses like you did. Reading issues 1 and 4 were completely different experiences than reading 2 and 3. Not necessarily a bad thing but I found them weaker than 1 and 4.
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Post by jackalope on Jun 19, 2011 16:34:04 GMT -5
Thanks and noted. Thought about that but wasn't sure which way to go, past or present? I'll try sticking with just one. Appreciate the feedback.
Number 5 up.
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Post by The Wonderful Wachter on Jun 20, 2011 2:47:20 GMT -5
I'm a fan of past with using present for effect.
As for Issue 5. XD at how the men were transformed back to normal. Epic, man, that's epic.
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Post by buck on Jun 20, 2011 20:29:17 GMT -5
Fantastic read thus far can't wait to see where the rest of your story takes you.
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Post by Stardrifter on Jun 20, 2011 21:24:54 GMT -5
I read way too much at once to comment on specifics, but all the issues were really good. I'm tired of waiting for her backstory though. And a more definitive explanation of her power level. Keep 'em coming.
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Post by jackalope on Jun 28, 2011 5:11:09 GMT -5
#6 up. Hope you enjoy. Back-story after this three parter.
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Post by The Wonderful Wachter on Jun 28, 2011 8:41:48 GMT -5
I hope Beth's dad doesn't die. That'd give Kate less reason to hate her aunt. ;_; Who am I kidding? Nobody needs a special reason to hate "Mrs." Kane.
Nice deal with the blood. You're telling the story in such a way that I'm not completely confident on if that was Diana or not.
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Post by Stardrifter on Jun 30, 2011 13:01:02 GMT -5
Was good. A little light on Diana but set up some supporting cast well. Looking forward to that backstory. Keep em coming.
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Post by jackalope on Jul 7, 2011 1:01:18 GMT -5
#7 up. Stay tuned for part 3.
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