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Post by liquidsword34 on Jun 8, 2012 11:46:10 GMT -5
First issue's up.
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Post by elite147 on Jun 8, 2012 19:28:43 GMT -5
I loved your issue! It was one of my favorite #1's on the whole board! I did have one problem with something you said about Kryptonian history, but I'll PM you on that later.
Overall though man, nice issue, I luved every second of it. Keep it coming,
-Elite
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Post by buck on Jun 8, 2012 20:50:25 GMT -5
Really enjoyed the issue. Can't wait to see where it goes from here.
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Post by C_Miller on Jun 9, 2012 13:13:44 GMT -5
Really liked this one.
First person is an extremely bold choice, especially when you're not of the demographic that you're writing about. I take it you're not a sixteen year old female, so that was very well done.
I'm also really interested in this character, although it was short you made me care about Kara and I can't wait to find out what happens next.
Keep em coming.
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Post by Stardrifter on Jun 10, 2012 9:10:25 GMT -5
It was an interesting start. Well written. You did the firt person narration pretty well.
I'm confused as to why they would be sending a 16 year old to Earth, especially when they don't know what effects it will have on her. Or why they want to contact Earth in the first place. There are countless civilized planets out there and Earth isnt very advanced in the grand scheme.
Well those are the questions the issue left me with. Also I'd like to know when this issue took place. Keep em coming.
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Post by Deleted on Jun 11, 2012 22:34:27 GMT -5
I will echo the other's sentiment that this was a very good first issue, and I am looking forward to more. There are a few plot logic issues for me-a space programmed needs to be a very controlled environment so the likelihood of people turning a blind eye to a dog tagging along without every possible variable of such an occurance being calculated from potential contagion, to impact on sustainability of life support for the journey et. al. seems odds and makes Krypton seem to be more of a group of scientific dilettantes than hard core dedicated scientists in a science based civilization as Krypton is typically displayed, and speaking of calculations, who plotted a course through an asteroid field without taken potential impact into account, or who plotted the course without realizing the asteroid field was there? Sloppy work from a meticulously scientific civilization.
It was nagging questions such as that which kept this form being a great issue for me, a good one, and I look forward to Kara on Earth, but for me, the Kryptonians came across more as goobers than geniuses due to the issues I mentioned.
-M
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Post by jackalope on Jun 12, 2012 3:57:59 GMT -5
Ha! Kryptonian Goobers, Lobo could have told you that...
I liked it, I'll be interested in what you do with this title. I wouldn't worry too much about the science of Krypton, I'm sure there was lots of reasoning behind why they would send a 16 year old with her dog (maybe secretly her dad knew of Krypton's coming destruction, maybe they're just so advanced adding a dog to the mix is no big worry). Anyway I look forward to seeing comes of this. Keep it up!
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Post by liquidsword34 on Jun 12, 2012 10:30:08 GMT -5
Thanks for the feedback. Many of the issues MRP and Star pointed out are explained later on, although I didn't really think about contamination, life support etc.
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Post by liquidsword34 on Jun 17, 2012 18:59:17 GMT -5
2nd issue up. I think it may have been a bit too long possibly, but that may just be me.
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Post by elite147 on Jun 17, 2012 22:42:08 GMT -5
That was a very enjoyable issue. It wasn't as good as your first issue, but still a solid 8.5 stars in my book. I can't wait to see where you take bloodshot. Also, I have to question why the shuttle is cold if it just came down from the atmosphere, since that makes it hot. But aside from the technical stuff, I liked the issue and look forward to #3.
-Elite
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Post by liquidsword34 on Jun 18, 2012 5:25:13 GMT -5
Also, I have to question why the shuttle is cold if it just came down from the atmosphere, since that makes it hot. Keep in mind that outer-space is ridiculously cold, −240°C or so. Travelling down from outer space wouldn't actually heat up the shuttle to the point it's hot. |
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Post by elite147 on Jun 18, 2012 10:16:56 GMT -5
Hmmm I suppose you may be right. You really do learn something new every day.
-Elite
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Post by buck on Jun 18, 2012 12:26:23 GMT -5
A strong issue. Can't wait to see where you go from here glad you set it in the future wastes seen in Hex.
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Post by Deleted on Jun 20, 2012 14:42:54 GMT -5
Supergirl #2 was a solid well-written issue. To be honest, I am not really a fan of post-Apocalyptic sci-fi at all, so I was a bit disappointed with the direction, but that is personal preference, not a comment on the quality of the issue. I've pretty much been done with post-Apocalyptic stuff since I got tired of the original Planet of the Apes movies and Road Warrior in the mid-to-late 80's so it's not anything you did or didn't do in the setting.
That said, it was still a solid, entertaining issue, and I will keep checking it out, even if I will be disappointed we don't get to see KAra interact with out larger UDCU setting.
-M
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Post by oberonfrost on Jun 21, 2012 20:53:46 GMT -5
I'm enjoying it so far. The first-person narrative was a bold choice. You write 16 year old girl very well. :-)
Like MRP, I'm not huge on post-apocalyptic sci-fi either. But it's still fun for me either way. Though I am hopeful that Kara will eventually make it to the "main shared universe" here. She's done a lot of time hopping in the real DCU, she could be up to it again here.
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Post by Stardrifter on Jun 22, 2012 13:07:34 GMT -5
Issue was okay. The shuttle should have been hot, as reentry would have heated it up no matter how cold space is.
My problem is the same problem I had with the first Batman series and the Hex one. I dont like other people being able to determine the future of the entire planet. Especially such a near future. I can always excuse it away as alternate future, but it just kinda bugs me is all.
Keep em coming.
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Post by C_Miller on Jun 26, 2012 1:54:39 GMT -5
I didn't realize that this was meant to be a Hex/Bats Future title. Not quite sure how I feel about that...
That being said, I did enjoy it. You really do "get" the voice of Kara, which is cool. And even though I wasn't a huge fan of it, you sold it well. I do look forward to the future.
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Post by liquidsword34 on Jul 7, 2012 19:39:55 GMT -5
#3 is up
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Post by Deleted on Jul 8, 2012 16:40:25 GMT -5
I enjoyed the confrontation with Bloodsport. You seem to be setting up a rematch, which might be ok, but Bloodsport does seem to be a bit one note, a good foe to show what Kara's capabilities and limitations are, but one who I think will have diminishing returns with each subsequent appearance unless new facets are introduced to the character.
The set up for Chemo looks interesting too.
One editing note-you missed just about every apostrophe on possessives, making them look like plurals instead, which caused me a little confusion initially until I went back to reread sentences to figure out through context what the deal was. Once I figures it out, it was an easier go, but still distracting. For example: Town's stuff has a different meaning than towns stuff and the lack of apostrophe changes the way I read it, having to look for the mistakes to read it properly or go back and reread it to figure out what you meant pulls me out of the story as a reader. So just an fyi for you.
-M
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Post by elite147 on Jul 8, 2012 18:33:19 GMT -5
I did like the bloodsport showdown and I think if you're setting him up to be a rival of sorts then it could be very interesting. I'm also interested in seeing where you take the Chemo story.
-Elite
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