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Post by spiderfan on May 24, 2011 23:12:47 GMT -5
Solid first issue. I liked the style and descriptions of the sky and such. Not much was really shown about Hal to this point, like what kind of person he is, but I am sure I'll get a better sense of that as I read on.
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Post by jross on May 24, 2011 23:55:08 GMT -5
Thanks, spiderfan. There is a lot of personal story in the second issue. I hope it entertains.
Also, ugh, just caught some typos. I type those up in OpenOffice and it likes to assume that instead of "jacking like a pickup" that I mean "lacking like a pickup."
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Post by superecwfan1 on May 25, 2011 11:14:57 GMT -5
I really liked the issue and making Hal a cop here. Its a unique change and the whole relationship with Carol being played up. Part of me always liked Guy so I'm a bit ..stunned he's an abusive dick . He's always been rough around the edges as a type , but I really am suprised he's that way. In #2 I liked the Abin Sur moments and wish he'd stay as a nagging voice in Hal's head. Pester him and drive him insane. I liked that part.
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Post by darthphere on May 26, 2011 21:56:13 GMT -5
Loved issue #2. Like what you're setting up here with the alcoholism and father issues. Really adds a human touch to Green Lantern. I would love for Abin Sur to stick around, it reminded me of the Worldmind and Nova.
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Post by jross on May 29, 2011 20:52:45 GMT -5
supercwfan1 and darthphere, thanks for the kind words, also, to lay fears aside, Guy has some serious character dev coming, and may get his own flashback issue sometime. And to both of you, no, we have not seen the last of Abin Sur.
Tease for Issue 3: Fighting, lots of it. Will Hal's new position as an extra-solar cop leave his home in peril?
EDIT: I've finally worked out the ring color system. Each of the colors will have strengths and weaknesses different from those in the comics.
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Post by buck on Jun 19, 2011 5:54:17 GMT -5
Really liked the changes you implemented in the characters in your mythos best of luck going forward.
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Post by Stardrifter on Jun 19, 2011 19:16:28 GMT -5
Not much to say that hasn't been said. Really solid story. Keep it up.
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Post by The Wonderful Wachter on Jun 19, 2011 22:29:54 GMT -5
Second Stardrifter and I'll add.
Given this is the DC Universe, I actually though Guy's character was a gorilla for a moment. That's the second time I've been fooled on this forum to thinking of Grodd.
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Post by jross on Jun 22, 2011 11:13:52 GMT -5
Thanks all. I'm sorry that I haven't been very active posting. I've finally got some free time, so I'll be finishing up issue three soon. As a side note, I am so strapped for time that unfortunately I haven't been able to read anyone else' stories for nearly a month. Sorry.
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Post by The Wonderful Wachter on Jun 22, 2011 14:29:51 GMT -5
It happens and and probably will happen to all of us at one point or another if it hasn't already.
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Post by jross on Jun 22, 2011 15:23:43 GMT -5
Issue 3 is up.
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Post by Ryan on Jun 22, 2011 15:37:05 GMT -5
Is it weird I got chills when reading the oath?
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Post by jross on Jun 22, 2011 15:38:32 GMT -5
Really? Cool. Did you like the rest?
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Post by Ryan on Jun 22, 2011 15:41:52 GMT -5
Yeah, I really like how you write Sines Toro. Keep'em coming that's for sure.
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Post by jross on Jun 22, 2011 15:43:38 GMT -5
Okay, I will.
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Post by The Wonderful Wachter on Jun 22, 2011 15:59:46 GMT -5
Loved Kilowag's poem. I too thought the oath was chill worthy. Sines Toro is well done.
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Post by jross on Jun 22, 2011 16:18:10 GMT -5
I figured I'd go all Alan Moore in this one and have an epilogue.
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Post by jackalope on Jun 22, 2011 17:26:23 GMT -5
Good job, really liked it. Well paced and is building up well.
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Post by buck on Jun 23, 2011 23:17:51 GMT -5
Kilowag as a warrior poet. I like.
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Post by jross on Jun 24, 2011 8:32:16 GMT -5
Thanks. That just came to me as I was writing the battle scene. Something along the lines of the GLC drawing courage from one another. I'm kind of bummed that the new movie had the government getting alien tech from a crash, as that's part of my outline and I don't want to be seen as ripping off their idea.
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