High Society: Ultimate JSA Response Thread

[The Wonderful Wachter]

Nah. Ted knew of her. Even says so in issue 1.

“Hey, just heard from Wildcat. He’s unavailable, but he told us to look into his daughter. A Yolanda Montez… apparently she’s living in Los Angeles.” Ryan called from across the room, leading Jay to call Jessie to let her know.

He just has never met her for reasons I can't say just yet and if you ask Teddy, he'll lie. Same with his powers. He's like Wolverine. Great paternal figure to everyone but his own children. Tomcat, on the other hand, he has no freaking clue about.

[Stardrifter]

Caught up with both issues. Very well done. Some exciting stuff going on. The only issues I can see are a number of spelling errors. My favorite being...

“Why would I be getting male here?” He asked himself.

Well where else would you be getting male?

And I think Yolanda's attitude was a little much. But other than that, great two issues. Keep 'em coming.

[tjkernan]

Jus read these. Thought they were a good. Read. Like how you tackled that zero issue, covering a lot of ground and history in a short amount of space. Can't wait to read more.

[C_Miller]

Sorry for the wait. The combination of lots of school work (writing 40 pages in a week) on top of writers block took its toll. Once winter break rolls around in a couple days, we'll be really in business.

Hope you like this issue. I don't think I like it quite as much as the last two, but I'm happier than I thought I'd be. Writing a team has been a lot of fun actually.

[buck]

I enjoyed the issue quite a bit I like how you are leaving the team to the younger generation. Everyone is getting a good amount of development throughout the first few issues. Can't wait for more issues.

[jackalope]

I'm enjoying the Younger generation team as well. Woot, two Vandal Savage storylines. Good interaction and nice relationships forming. Look forward to more.

[C_Miller]

More will be on its way soon as I just finished JSA #4 and then immediately started JSA #5. I'm actually having a lot of fun with this very diverse group of characters. I hope it shows in my writing.

[buck]

Vandal Savage is great. I love villains who canattack the character mentally and physically. I really dig your interpretation of savage.

[jackalope]

I really like how this team building arc is going, the interplay of the new team vs the old team, and how you are working in the Spoilers. Good work.

[superecwfan1]

I loved the recent JSA issues. Kinda surprised Jessie took the name "Swift" and all. I also didn't like Sand taking command of the team from Jack. I can see some friction there...between the 2.

[The Wonderful Wachter]

Damn... How many bottles of Miralcro did Jim have? Guess he took them all when Hourman kicked the habit.

Congrats on being the first as I get caught up.

[The Wonderful Wachter]

Ah, the brick. Enemy to man, hero, villain, and window alike.

Nice issue. Enjoyed the action. *SPOILER*'s (not the character) death didn't quite have an impact until the final statement of the issue. I'd personally try to build on that without trying to completely copy Jack's growth that we didn't see.

[buck]

Yeah I had to say I loved the foreshadowing with the death. And I agree with Wachter divulging the two stories of Jack and Rick is going to be tricky, but can;t wait to see what else happens with the JSA.

[C_Miller]

Thanks. I do have unique plans for both Rick and Jack. While their origins are similar, that is pretty much it.

Next arc will be the official rebuilding and the first issue should be up soon! Hope you enjoy.

[jackalope]

I really like the team you've got going here, the mix of old and new is going to be really cool. Liked Dr Midnight, kind of wish I got to see Vandal in this one, but I know he'll turn up again in the future. It'll be interesting to see how the team plays out- you've got a few leader-types who I'm sure will be keen to take charge. Hopefully you wont have to write too many more funerals... Great stuff.

[kardonwire]

Just read issues zero to two and I enjoyed it. Always been a big fan of Jay Garrick, Hourman and the J.S.A. in general so it's nice to see familiar terrority in the backstory and characters while doing your own thing. Which was pretty handy when Courtney got nearly killed(?) since I really didn't see that coming.

Also quite liked the crossover with Spoilers, it was a nice suprise to see Stephanie arrive on the scene.

[superecwfan1]

It was a good read for #5. I liked the team facing Vandel Savage and Artemitis showing up and saving the day at the end. I was a bit sad about Rex Tyler there. But the rule is ...usually if there isn't a body or death showed , the guy isn't dead. Rick Tyler not able to show grief and push his friends away was a nice tough there.

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JSA # 0 Prologue
I like the opening, it develops Rex well and has a great entrance for Starman. Sometimes you have a tendency to blunt the action with the way you structure the sentences, look for more dynamic ways to present the action to keep it up front and impactful. Make Rex the doer no the receiver or recipient of the actions more often than not.

I like the way you introduce characters and give the reader a visual impression of them. It helps make the characters more solid and real, less a blank slate. You usually include a short act or insight, kind of like a “tell” in poker that shows the reader something about each character rather than just telling them-Sandman’s snort tells us he’s likely cynical and contrarian right off the bat, we don’t need to be told, we’re shown it from the get go and it makes the rest of his action make so much more sense in context. This is excellent.

I love the way you introduce the villain with the photo montage. Vandal Savage is a favorite, but even if not, this method build shim up before he ever appears in the present on screen and sets the tone for the scale of the struggle against Savage-exactly what a prologue should do.

You have some very good interactions during the bit with the registration of the secret identities, good character building stuff that also rivets up the tension between the feds and the JSA.

The rest of the vignettes are excellent, and you spend a lot of time developing these characters, showing how they react to these major tentpole events in their history as we move through the overview to set up the story in the present. However, I can’t help but feel there is one thing missing-we never got to see the full team in action together at the height of their glory kicking ass and taking names-we got the build up and the tear down, but never a look at them in action in their heyday. One more “action sequence” as payoff for the build up before you started tearing down towards your starting point in the present would have just put this over the top in coolness. What’s there is excellent, but as a reader I can’t help but feel a little cheated not seeing the full team in action after you gave us just a taste with Rex and Ted in the opening scene.

So overall, very strong debut issue. There are some rough spots in structure, and some diction errors, bit aside form these editing issues, this is a very good set up for a series I am looking forward to delving into.
-M

[C_Miller]

Wow, glad you liked it. I actually went back and re-read it after reading your review and I'm actually quite proud of it. Makes me kind of want to go back and revisit some Older JSA adventures at some point in the future.

The comments on the action are understood. Action is kind of my weak point hands down. I'm relatively comfortable with plot and character, I do have trouble with action and by action I mean everything involving people doing things. And it's even weaker at this stage in my development as a writer.

But like I said, thanks for the review.

[C_Miller]

That took waaaaay longer than I wanted it too. It's kind of disjointed, but I'm pleased with it.

Please read and review.