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Post by C_Miller on Feb 29, 2012 23:10:15 GMT -5
Liked the issue. I have to say I'm a little bit uncomfortable about the big reveal because one of my characters is a caveman (Vandal Savage), but like wachter said there seems to be enough wiggle room to make it work.
I really like how you deal with the relationship between Carter and Dr. Fox. That's probably my single favorite thing about your series and one of those things that makes your series different in a really worth while way. I'm trying to think of what it reminds me of... kind of Skinner from the X-Files. He's plays a really great straight man.
As for the end, oh man. Great stuff. As the Ultimate DC's kind of equivalent to a chief editor... I have to say this made me giddy. Lots of great stuff coming up on the docket...
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Post by superecwfan1 on Mar 1, 2012 1:16:48 GMT -5
You can have Savage get away and sneak off with a few survivors before the Thanagarian's started seeding the planet and wiped a lot of the earlier species out. So there is some wriggle room there. But I am surprised at the fact no one mentioned this days ago. I was wondering what many would think of the whole reveal I did.
Doctor Fox is the normal guy in a sea of crazy. The one normal guy who suddenly gets thrown into this crazy world of a guy who literally has existed for thousands of years. I see his role as Joe Dawson from Highlander in a sense. He advises and keeps a record of things for Carter Hall .
As far as the final scene we discussed it , me and Buck on which way to go. I wanted the whole deal where Kalibak is awoke there. I wanted it to be intense and be a moment where you know its coming next month and it won't be easy.
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Post by C_Miller on Mar 1, 2012 2:20:44 GMT -5
I don't know about the other reviews, but I personally just read both the issues and that was the first thing that stuck out in my mind. And I was just using Vandal Savage as an example, because I know as a fact that through my series, he has his family line through a lot of people currently on the Earth. But he's not the only one. We have Gods, Father Time whose link to humanity is dubious and we have other writers who may be interested in dealing with Earth's distant past.
I'm not saying that the Thanagarians couldn't have had something to do with the development of humanity. I actually like the idea of humans being a melting pot of a bunch of different creatures be it "Gods," cavemen, Thanagarians, Apes (for those militant evolutionists out there). It's not a bad idea at all, but its something that definitely needs to be refined so that all people can join in on the fun.
In the future, big stuff like this that has the potential of causing "controversy" should be brought up either to one of the admins or better yet, the entire community. I think when Buck was starting his first Checkmate series he had an idea for the Cold War to still be going on in the UDC World and he posted a thread about it in the author's discuss. It led to a dialogue and he eventually refined his ideas. This is a little bit smaller scale than that, but similar procedures should be taken because its something that effects a lot of titles.
I'm not saying it needs to be taken down but it is something you need to talk about with us in order to refine its universe-wide effects.
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Post by superecwfan1 on Mar 1, 2012 13:27:39 GMT -5
I sorta hyped it would be controversial . I said it months ago when I had plans lined out for it lol. I wanted to create a bit of a splash there with it. To create a bit of controversy and let some figure a way around it.
So I don't mind if anyone does that . I'm sure many can find a way around that and I welcome them to do it.
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Post by C_Miller on Mar 1, 2012 14:51:47 GMT -5
Okay cool. That's all that really matters to me, because I have some big stuff with Vandal Savage dealing with the human gene pool.
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Post by superecwfan1 on Mar 27, 2012 1:45:07 GMT -5
#16 is up and with Buck busy awhile work wise , its likely gonna be awhile til he's editing for me again. Anyhow I tried touching this one up best I could and reworked some things. Also I wanted to say I hope everyone likes Kalibak arriving. Plus I wanted to really describe the Boom Tube entrance to make it unique . Some may recognize where I got it from , if not I will reveal it .
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Post by jackalope on Apr 5, 2012 7:06:57 GMT -5
Your writing, though a little haphazard in grammar, is simple but effective. You do a great job in doing short punchy action scenes and are able to move the story along with a good speed. I really liked this last issue and am looking forward to the arc it's setting up. Great work man!
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Post by superecwfan1 on Apr 7, 2012 16:48:11 GMT -5
Thanks Jackalope. #17 should be fun for the big fight that will be done . Gonna be a knockdown , drag out waaaar....lol
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Post by superecwfan1 on Apr 18, 2012 17:30:07 GMT -5
Hawkman #17 is up. In this one you can tell that Kalibak isn't gonna be an easy foe ahead. I also wanted to leave a surprise there at the end for those who have been reading since #1.
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Post by buck on Apr 18, 2012 21:07:11 GMT -5
ThiS issue had me torn. I really liked the scene where carter reveals he is hawkman, but I was really hoping that Kalibal would be portrayed as more then just a big dumb brute so that part disappointed me.
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Post by The Wonderful Wachter on Apr 19, 2012 11:20:27 GMT -5
Here's a challenge for you on your next issue... Try to limit your use of "as" to no more than three per lets say 5 to 7 paragraphs. Note: the use of as in a simile counts only as one. You overused it in the first paragraph which in turn had me keep an eye out for it in the rest of the issue. (Sorry, but I get paid to notice these things and I try to turn it off for hobbies... doesn't always happen). If you stop the repetition then the flow of your story should improve. And that's something you're really good at. Your stories and plots keep me coming back (H.I.V.E. and the Bors arc are probably two of my favorite stories on this board) but as an editor, the little grammar things make me cringe.
I agree with buck that I'm not a fan of Kalibak coming across as yet another brute when as a "Herald" he has a chance to be so much more. I did, however love the interlude at the prison. It's nice to see the dynamic between Carter and Hawkwoman start to improve and evolve. And it's good to see Carter starting to fight smart.
I do have a suggestion since it's just plain badass... After the Summer Events, it might be cool if you switch Carter over to his YJ costume or one of his more armored forms to keep up with the ever increasing threat. (And to stop looking tacky...can't say I'm a fan of either of your protagonist's looks). That and if he draws on the power of the Nth metal, there would be more to draw on.
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Post by liquidsword34 on Apr 19, 2012 18:01:48 GMT -5
I liked the interlude in the prison, both in the execution and the way it shows how the attack is effecting people besides Hawkman. I do agree that I feel Kalibak shouldn't have been a brute,although I also understand you're showing him as a destructive force which you did effectively.
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Post by superecwfan1 on Apr 20, 2012 20:32:04 GMT -5
I know its how it comes across. But part of me doesn't wanna reveal too much of what Buck's arc will be soon. Its more or less...I'm trying to keep the arc and what Buck does in JLA as secret as possible but throw hints ...Darkseid is coming this summer. I know Kalibak should be more smarter and would reveal what his father is wanting. But I really don't wanna give too much away for the JLA storyline.
I'm glad you guys liked the Prison spot there. I have plans for Fadeaway Man to return in the 30's at some point. His cloak is...... well....you will see.
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Post by superecwfan1 on Apr 20, 2012 20:39:15 GMT -5
Also Wachter ...about Carter gaining armor .... its gonna happen after the Future Darkseid tie-in. I leave Carter Hall in a situation where he will get that soon. The storyline will be a pretty big one. Perhaps the biggest one I have ever done . Its gonna surprise people at the set up of it and how it works out. I know once I send you or Buck the stories , you will like the direction things take.
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Post by The Wonderful Wachter on Apr 20, 2012 20:42:32 GMT -5
Woohoo. Armored Carter is one of the most badass looking characters in comics.
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Post by Stardrifter on May 5, 2012 14:45:41 GMT -5
Caught up. Good as always. As for the big reveal, I don't think something that extreme should have been decided by one author, but it has wiggle room as others have said. If nothing else than the fact that it doesn't make sense.
If a space faring people wanted to groom an entire planet to be slaves, why would they stock to Egypt? They have spaceships. Why are all the people over the rest of the planet not worshiping Ra and building pyramids?
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Post by superecwfan1 on May 6, 2012 1:32:07 GMT -5
I was watching one of those documentaries and discussed the earliest periods of civilization . That most came from the areas of Africa and branched out. So I was going with that aspect that Egypt then was one of the biggest earliest civilizations and had its classes of people etc etc.
It fit what the the Thanagarians are to me. There is the strong ...the warriors. And there is the slave class.
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Post by superecwfan1 on May 6, 2012 2:44:26 GMT -5
Just posted the double-sized Hawkman #18. Its one that finishes the Herald arc. Hope everyone enjoys it. Plus the unique way they finally are able to at least get a win over Kalibak ...or slow him down lol.
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Post by buck on May 6, 2012 10:50:09 GMT -5
I felt the arc went out with a whimper and carter got off easy for fighting a God.
Also I'm really itching for another former life story.
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Post by superecwfan1 on May 6, 2012 23:04:00 GMT -5
Well I don't think it was too easy. Carter got the crap beat out of him and nearly was squeezed and popped without Shiera's help there.
A former life story is coming actually soon. Its coming along at #21. This one will please everyone as its basically centered on Khufu and Chay-Ara.
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